Unnies!!! >_< Please help me with my poem!!!

This poem is for my English assignment....I suck at poetry >_< I would like advise and critiques to improve this draft. Please take a look and tell me what you think. ^_^ Thank you!!!


Wearing my glass mask,
I became her.
Aiming for the impossible,
For I am strong; not brittle.
Thriving to be my best,
For I wish to be like the rest.
Hiding my weakness,
For I hope to impress.
Wearing my glass mask,
I disguise myself.

But as I struggle and stumble,
My fragments of hope start to crumble.
For I am not as strong as I thought,
Nor am I be-loved as I ought.
Wearing my glass mask,
I cover my tears.
The tears that are shed,
Shall remain unseen behind the glass.

You know I have a friend that reads a lot in school ~~ I will ask her what she thing ok

WOW Eunji! That's pretty gooood!
If you consider that 'suckish', then I must be worse LOL
But seriously, you write very well!

Raina wrote:You know I have a friend that reads a lot in school ~~ I will ask her what she thing ok

aigoo!!~ thank you so much, boss~ >w<

nisyaz wrote:WOW Eunji! That's pretty gooood!
If you consider that 'suckish', then I must be worse LOL
But seriously, you write very well!

Aaahh....I'm glad you think it's good!! ^_^ I was afraid it might sound too corny. >.< Thank you, unnie!!!~<3

She likes it but she also find some parts corny ~forgot which parts but its pretty good